Peer Review: Personal Essay – English 110: F21

Please fill out this form for your peer review partner by no later than Wednesday, October 6th. If you are filling this out to complete an EXTRA peer review for weekly work, please submit this no later than Friday, October 8th to give your peer time to work on the feedback.

Your name*
First Last
Email*
Date*
MM slash DD slash YYYY
The name of the person whose paper you're reviewing (i.e. your "partner" in this form)*
First Last
Which assignment are you reviewing for your partner?*
In your own words, briefly describe the assignment that your partner has completed. What is this assignment? What was the purpose of this assignment?*
Look at your partner's feedback request, or if you had a conversation with them, think about your conversation. In your own words, what does your partner want to know about this draft? What stage are they in? Are they looking to make sure that they're meeting the assignment's requirements? Or something else? What kind of feedback are they asking you to give them as a reader?*
In your own words, give a brief summary of your partner's entire argument.*
Use this box to give a "reverse outline" of each paragraph in your partner's essay. To do this, think about the purpose of each paragraph (for example: In paragraph 1, [partner] connects their argument to [author's] argument in the chapter of BIAW about [x.]. In paragraph 2, [partner] adds further support for their argument by showing how a rise in CUNY student tuition has had a particularly negative impact on working students…etc.)*
Look at the introduction section of your partner's draft. (1) State the connection between a Bad Ideas About Writing chapter and your partner's draft, (2) Say what your partner's research question is, (3) Say what the exigence / purpose of this project is (i.e. how is your partner helping you to understand why we need to know about this problem?)*
Look at the Literature Review section of your partner's draft. (1) Are there three scholarly sources? (2) Are the sources SYNTHESIZED (and not just summarized)? (3) How does this section help your partner to answer their research question?*
Were there any moments in the Literature Review section when your partner is (1) using too many quotes and not enough paraphrases, (2) using too much of a single quote (i.e. not just using the part that they need) (3) not properly citing something?*
Look at the Methods and Audience section, and answer the following questions. (1) What is the SPECIFIC audience that your partner is trying to reach with their research? Have they given an audience yet? (2) Will your partner conduct primary research or share the secondary research that they have conducted with their audience? (3) How will your partner share their research or how are they planning to conduct their primary research?*
Look at the Plan and Timeline section, and answer the following questions. (1) Has your partner given specific dates by when they will complete each task for Assignment 3? (2) Does the plan that they've outlined seem reasonable to you? Are they giving themselves enough time to get everything done? (3) Look at the syllabus and check their timeline agains the due dates. Are there any dates that they need to adjust?*
Look at the Works Cited in your parnter's draft, and answer the following questions. (1) Does your partner cite all of the sources in their draft, including the chapter from Bad Ideas About Writing? Are there any sources that they missed? (2) Are your partner's sources in alphabetical order? (3) Does your partner cite journal articles sources AS journal articles (and not as websites?) (4) Do your partner's sources have a hanging indent (i.e. the first line of the source is justified all the way to the left, and every line after that in the same source is indented)? (5) Is there anything else that you're noticing about the formatting of your partner's Works Cited page that you want to note here?*
Were there any moments when you read the essay that you were confused about the argument that your partner was making? Note them here, and also put a comment in the draft.*
Which claim(s) in your partner's draft are the strongest ones? Say why you think so here.*
Which claim(s) in your partner's draft could use some more work? Say why you think so here.*
Grammar, Usage, and Punctuation
This section is a place to give your partner feedback on moments that their essay departed from conventions as you understand them.
In the comments on the draft, note any PATTERNS of issues that you noticed. If your partner did this once, it's not a pattern. This should be something that your partner did at least two or three times. Check off the issues that you addressed below.*
- Unfamiliar / inaccurate / imprecise word choices
- Inconsistency in verb tense (i.e. your partner switches between past tense and present tense)
- Incomplete sentences
- Sentences that are inaccurately punctuated (i.e. a comma appears where a semicolon should)
- Capitalization issues (i.e. something is capitalized when it should be lower case, or something is lower case when it should be capitalized)
- Sentence variety issues (i.e. the sentences are all the same length; too long; too short)
- Word repetition issues (i.e. the writer uses the word “furthermore” four times in the same paragraph)
- Redundancy (i.e. the writer says the same thing more than once in a paragraph
- Concision issues (i.e. the writer takes a really long time to say something when fewer words would do the trick)
- Anything else not listed here
Please explain why you checked any of the boxes that you checked above.*
Requirements Checklist
Check off each of the requirements that your partner has met so far.
Please check all that apply:*
- This draft contains at least 750 words.
- This draft includes an introduction section that ties this project to a chapter in Bad Ideas About Writing.
- There is a clearly stated research question in the introduction section.
- This draft includes a “literature review” section that contains at least 3 SCHOLARLY sources.
- The sources are cited correctly, or there is evidence of a citation practice.
- There is a “methods and audience” section which describes how this research will be shared with an audience
- In the “methods and audience” section, your partner talks about HOW they’re going to share their research with an audience outside of this class
- There is a “plan and timeline” section with dates and a plan for Assignment 3
- There is a Works Cited page on a separate page.
- All sources that are included in this draft also appear in the Works Cited section.
- There is an original title
- There is a heading with your partner’s name, the professor’s name, the name of the class, the date, and the word count.
- Each page contains the author’s last name and the page number in the top right-hand corner
If there are any boxes that you did not check off above, please explain why.*
Takeaways and Priorities
This is the feedback that your partner might use if they’re feeling overwhelmed and really need to focus on the top strengths and top points of improvement for the next version of the draft.
List three changes that you would make in this draft before turning in the final version. Please be as specific as possible (not "you should expand").*
What is working well about this draft? Please be as specific as possible (not "great job").*
Any other feedback for your partner?*

Grammar, Usage, and Punctuation

Requirements Checklist

Takeaways and Priorities